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Jeremie Rosner:
some great poses
I liked the "cut our deal Now"
good job
Michel Giguère:
Good camera and layout, some parts of the animation are stronger than others, the pose with the crossed arms does not look real, but I really like your timing when the other guy stands up.
Ken Rice:
Good effort - however feels a little over acted (unnatural) in places.
Jean-Luc Delhougne:
Nice ideas here. Timing is cool and poses not bad. It lacks a bit of subtleties though...And the lipsynch could be more precise ;) Overall it works great !
Ryan Lowe:
if your going to run a CU on one of the characters. make sure the animation is sharp!
Taber Dunipace:
No facial expressions. Poses need more careful attention to detail. Try to pose your characters a bit more naturally; film yourself for reference.
Virgil Tanasa:
the lipsync isn't really working. also, some stronger poses would look better, watch out for the twinning of the last actions, he does the same gesture twice(up-down, up-down)
Erik Westlund:
Second shot with character animated into and out of the camera is a little much. He looks to be proud of being an accessory of 'espionage and murder'. Fist swing gesture on "...cut a deal" is awkward. Movements are all very simple and each seems to swing form joint like a hinge. Mouth and facial animation is very basic. Jaws flap with only a little shape change to match speech. Timing of lip-sync is off. Screen left character appears frozen from the ribs down.
Zainab Siddiqui:
Lip-synch could have been better
David Andrade:
Motion originates from the hips. Focus on that
Victor Wong:
Lip sync seems a little off towards the end, possibly due to choice of mouth shape. Good gesturing.
Russell:
This could have been done without camera cuts.
The lip sync isn't working. Spend more time on the timing of the jaw opening and closing.
James O'Neill:
There is some good overlap, but the poses seem a bit weak. I would use more gestural poses incorporating more of the body controls than just the arms and head. The camera cuts are a bit distracting.
sharad kumar:
when he says 'we've got bupkis' u can move the pelvis a bit abd show some weight shifting..!
Nanda van Dijk:
you should take a closer look at your libsinq, and maybe try to act your scene, some of your poses are a bit unnatural. but its a great stard. keep it up!!!
Ezra Allen:
nice animation, not too sure about the poses. the arms crossed like a cadaver thing is not a natural pose, have a look at how people actually cross theyre arms. Folded arms is something I tend to avoid because its a cutthrough nightmare you need to set up your rig specialy to pull it off or be prepared to key every frame.
I really like the bit where he stands up on "now" nicely done, but on "while we can still cut a deal" the fist gesture on the left arm seems an odd choice. Maybe thumping the desk would have worked better.
sean connolly:
some good performances. something that caught my eye is how all the beats have a very similar timing. you might want to mix subtler beats and slower beats with the quick big ones. and offset things so not everything happens at once.
Christopher Salamat:
Need a lot of work on the lip sync. With the volume turned off it almost seems like they're not saying anything understandable almost like a puppet. Concentrate on make the correct mouth shapes more the sound. Look in a mirror and say the dialog while your animating
Chelsea Hiatt Farley:
Pose on "now that we're accessories..." doesn't work for me - feels like he's proud instead of nervous.









Animator: HIM CHAN
Description: enjoy the clip!!
Experience: 1YR
Time taken: 24HRS