luc:

Nice staging. But still need work

Mike York:

Its a start but I think you may have broke the rig. You may need to re work this one.

Hernán Bruna:

What is wrong with his tongue o’-o

Will Mann:

Make sure you keep his tongue in his mouth. Kind of funny though.

Emmanuel Vergne:

everything is too linear
the pose on frame 23 is way too strong !!! Be careful not to break your characters ;)

Imus zai:

critique:
Man- his head doesn't need to go that far back when he gives the cake.
And when he gives the cake, maybe he could hold it abit longer.
When he say's 'YES', instead of the hand flick pose you have now - maybe the fininshing pose would look better ( the one with his hand above behind his head

Women-
When she recieves the cake maybe she could hold it abit longer other than that i like her movement!

Taber Dunipace:

Ok, even ignoring the tongue glitch, the characters are still moving around without seemingly any purpose.

Try to pose your characters a bit more naturally; film yourself for reference.

Tim Nowak:

You need to work on your timeline some more.

sharad kumar:

take up 1 or 2 second scenes and work on that...take ref from films.

Pablo Piccione:

Good, but I think is a little floaty. And we miss de opportunitie to know what the old lady thinks.

Yeray Díaz Díaz:

Aside from the tongue problem you've got nice foundation on the expressions, but you need to move the characters. They're extremely still, pose them, move them, communicate with them.

Damian Isherwood:

careful that you don't keep the body locked in place, stand infront of a mirror and repeat the same actions, take note that the lower body moves also, in fact most of the movement is generated from the hips and is then followed by the rest of the body.

lizzie:

red floaty thing is very distracting

Erik Westlund:

On frame 24 the character arches back far enough to break his own neck. Why? No, really... why? While creating a pantomime version without a prop is fine in theory you could also work out a concept in planning that avoids such technical issues of transferring an object between characters. The floating cigar (?) is very distracting. Avoid these props and such technical issue for now by learning to work creatively within your current technical limits. There are hints of a worthwhile performance in your poses. Give your characters an more natural stance and shift the weight of each so that they are not standing symmetrically over both feet. Doing this with change what we see in the shot dramatically. Don't just pivot the hip, shift weight but moving the COG so the the entire line of action changes. Animate the entire torso, neck, and head as a unified whole; not as separate pieces. Twist the spine of each character a little and allow the weight to rise and fall slightly. Facial expressions usually shift quickly instead of turning on as if by a dimmer switch like the last expression the male character is making.

Paulo Clayton:

I like the concept, the awkwardness of the regifting. Be careful to proof your work, I'm perplexed by the tongue hanging suspended in midair, coming in and out of the guy's face... was that intentional?

Matthew Simkins:

I suppose I don't have to point out the floating tongue!

Joe Jacob:

Fairly good animation, but the exaggerated head back shot was a little awkward. And what's that floaty thing?

Phil:

I think ther's a probleme with his tongue

Renn:

What on earth is that flying thing coming out of his mouth? Idle movement is noticeably unusual too, the orange guy's hips moving independently for some reason. Nice effort.

Dan Weiland:

You got a little something funky going on with the male character's tongue there .... but I'm sure you noticed that. The female character's neck looks a bit odd too - i think it would help to tilt her shoulders along with moving the head left and right to make it look less isolated and more realistic.

HARISH:

good effort ... but , a lot of things missing.

David Andrade:

The tongue is flying and I'm sure everyone knows and sees it, but, it feels rather unprofessional...
He reacts before she starts 'remarkably." That I feel he needs to be a bit more still... remember he's nervous! Also that's a very weird gesture in the beginning.. I really don't understand why he pulls back so much. It doesn't really add to the story.

Lindsay Thompson:

Make sure to check your render before you submit and make sure the tongue is connected!!..haha. But that tongue did make me laugh...

Jason Smith:

Fix that tongue, and watch that neck. The poses are a little 'swimmy'. Overall though, good potential in this piece.

Aaron Clement:

Okay, the head scratch was good... showed he was nervous... His tongue wasn't parented to his head... and was very distracting... Felt like this one was only half way there.

Allier Zelaya:

You might want to fix the tongue problem. Also you might want to show the other character talking.

deenad:

something wrong!

Dave H Shovlin:

You lost your tongue there pal.

Dan Harriman:

Perhaps you should have deleted the tongue!! :D Good effort I like his sarcastic "yes". However make sure that you portray weight in the poses. Lower his hips so that they are actually resting on the legs.

Julianne McCartney:

I really would have liked to see an interpretation of the woman's reaction.

Robert Braddy:

Haha the old tongue out of the head trick