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A Jailed Alien Mystery

by Edward Davies

Final Rating: 6.15. Finished 24 out of 282 entries.

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Animator: Edward Davies

Description: A boy eagerly tries to unlock an imprisoned alien's secret by talking.

Experience: 2 years

Time taken: 26 days

Comments:

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Bo Ming Xu:

Spooky :D Nice! Watch out for the lipsync when he says "to figgering out your secret" It doesn't quite match up and the lips are just smacking with no purpose. Try to animate with a mirror and make the same mouth shapes while your working and scrubbing the timeline. I find that helps. Also, don't be afraid to move Ray's upper torso. Near the end, he looks like he just got some serious neck pain.

Rohit Jagtap:

Animation is nice, but why he kept his left hand sticked to right hand(parented)?? Is he hiding something from other person ??

Pushpendra Sharma:

Nice,good luck

Jamie F:

I think the constrained hand could be unconstrained towards the end as it feels a little static. Nice though!

Varun Boomboi:

Pretty good. I'd give difference in the poses though? It looked repeated.

Mike M.:

I wish you had a quick cut to the secondary character - I would like to see his face. In a longer production, this is fine, but for a small clip, we are asking for more. Nice hand gestures.

Sofia Conciarelli:

I liked the first part, especially the part when he says "your secret", but in the close up I was distracted by the left hand attached on the right arm. You should have changed that pose

Frank O:

That second breath thought and facial expression is the best interpretation this month.

Christopher Pohl:

pretty good. should definitely play with mixing up the poses more. By the end, i feel like the primary guy shouldnt be grabbing on his arm anymore. His mouth shapes and motions all feel really large. They aren't exactly bad shapes, but most should be pretty small changes that flow more together and only exaggerate the phenoms on key words that the dialogue hits or expresses more, like "still" "must" "so" "you", etc. Aside from that, the body and little hand flick all feel solid.